Thursday, May 10, 2012

The Leaf


The leaf
30/4/12

The crunchy leaf flew past like an airplane.

The caterpillars are making holes because they are squirming through the leaf to get food.

The leaves parachute down onto the ground when the wind blows.

The leaves disappear into dust that turns into nothing.

The stalk is changing color and it is such a pretty color.

The leaves are quietly whispering like children just about going out for play.

By Casey Ralph
10 years




WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)
Yes
Made the nouns do something
Yes
Started each new description on a new line
Yes
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
mostly


Me reciting my poem.

5 comments:

  1. Amazing personification
    I like how you just let your Imagination go wild

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  2. I love your poem Casey. I like the sentence that says The crunchy leaf flew past like an aeroplane.

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  3. Hey Casey - that is an awesome poem, very descriptive

    Mum

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  4. I love your poem Lizard!!:D
    It has a lot of adjectives and nouns.
    What is your favorite part of the poem?

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    1. Thank you Kazza
      I think my favourite part was ...
      The leaves are quietly whispering like children just about to go out to play.

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